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Personal Statement Peer Review Group 1

This is the page for  Group 1: LeeAnne Baumdraher, Sabrina Gissendaner, Ashleigh Swinehart, Angie Souva

 

Everyone should post a comment here where you briefly introduce yourself, you explain what your Personal Statement is about (that is, what’s the program you’re hypothetically applying to, etc.) and where you share a links to the Google Doc version of the draft of your Personal Statement and of a draft of your assignment memo.  Remember to share both of these documents and make them so anyone with a link can edit them!

You have until Friday to begin peer review! If you have a draft ready to share earlier, by all means share it. But you have to have a version of your Personal Statement up and ready for peer review by the end of the day on Friday. If you are late, I will dock a letter grade from your project.

To get started, everyone should post a comment in your group’s page where you briefly introduce yourself, you explain what your Personal Statement is about (that is, what’s the program you’re hypothetically applying to, etc.) and where you share a links to the Google Doc version of the draft of your Personal Statement and of a draft of your assignment memo.  Remember to share both of these documents and make them so anyone with a link can edit them!

To guide your comments, it’s probably useful to review the assignment again. Remember that your personal statement needs to be based on a real personal statement and that should be clear in the work you share. You want to offer advice and guidance about the effectiveness of the personal statement: that is, does it include specific detail, do you learn something about the writer, does it meet the requirements of that personal statement, etc. Make your comments right on your classmates’ Google Doc.

After you are done with your peer review, I want you to fill out this survey about the process. You should fill this survey out for each of your peers in your group by the end of the day Monday.

This survey serves two basic purposes. First, it helps in giving your peers even more feedback on their draft in a constructive way. Second, it helps me figure out who completed the peer review process as I directed. I’ll share the results of the survey with everyone on Tuesday of next week.

5 Comments
  1. LeeAnne Baumdraher permalink

    Hello!

    My name is LeeAnne. I’m pursuing a creative writing major and an accounting minor. I tell you this because this is what I included in my personal statement. Explaining why a creative writing degree gives me a better edge than someone with an accounting degree, when applying for an accounting internship, was tough, but I think I did an okay job. Please, let me know what I can improve.

    Here are my links for the Personal Statement and the Memo, respectively:

    https://docs.google.com/document/d/1dz9-bnkesnBHGtMhsEmP4S81yEesA22AB2ia3zSQVzE/edit?usp=sharing

    https://docs.google.com/document/d/1BSkatqekj_k4srG_h49bDTvLOvaZuRoGmpZFz7mBQrE/edit?usp=sharing

  2. Ashleigh Swinehart permalink

    Hello,

    I’m Ashleigh Swinehart as you all have probably seen from my comments every other day! I am here at EMU as a Japanese Language and Culture major and English Language minor. Being a Japanese major helped me decide on my topic for the Personal Statement assignment much easier than I initially thought. I chose to apply to the JET Program (Japanese Exchange and Teaching Program) in order to land a position as a teacher in Japan. My ultimate goal may not involve me becoming a teacher, but this option was the closest thing I could think of that would apply to me. I followed some models of other peoples’ personal statements (applying for the JET Program) and also found what is typically written about within the statements. I did the best I could and I hope you all like it!

    Personal Statement:
    https://docs.google.com/a/emich.edu/document/d/1rMzY_XtZgTSPJX6btik2-hjLdMTEkmR-dxp4WtUOMzE/edit

    Memo:
    https://docs.google.com/a/emich.edu/document/d/1DZvyKhik8unrMfMp2_7szDEC2sND_3b66QGj8dL0vHA/edit

    • LeeAnne Baumdraher permalink

      Ashleigh, I think your personal statement is in “view only.” I’m not able to type anything or make any comments.

      • Ashleigh Swinehart permalink

        Oh my…I am so sorry! I am not the greatest at Google Docs and thought selecting “Share” would give you access… I think have fixed it now. Again, I am sorry about that. :/

  3. Sabrina Gissendaner permalink

    Hi Group!

    Sorry for the late submission, I was having some serious computer issues! Now that things are back in order, allow me to introduce myself! My name is Sabrina, and I am in my senior year at Eastern. I am just starting the Written Communication program, so I’m newer to the world of professional writing. I chose to write my personal statement as a mock admissions statement for a graduate program in literature. I don’t have any serious plans right now to attend graduate school, but I may apply in the future. I wasn’t quite sure how to end my personal statement, so it’s rough right now, but I appreciate any and all feedback that you guys can give!

    Personal statement: https://docs.google.com/a/emich.edu/document/d/1WG62riZQ_zMB5d0oPqFROb4YOH4k2p0damH9j1DnQ7I/edit?usp=sharing

    Memo: https://docs.google.com/a/emich.edu/document/d/13ibvUpqHpp8iiB4480jsh2uhHywaCzRrCd_NW0mCj6I/edit?usp=sharing

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